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Vehement God

Author: Ramneet
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Vehement God

God is emotional too.
God values ardent feelings, emotions and love.
God values the longing for Him.
God is touched when our inner world is touched.
Inherent and profound relationship though not tangible.
Nexus is through thoughts and emotions.
Emotions have power and energy in them.
Connection with Him is through emotions and feelings.

Submitted on 2015-05-22 22:37:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this poem, which I am reading before reading any of your other ones. This verse-form ought to have a name in English but I don't think the professors have ever got beyond stock metres and rhyme-schemes, in their ability to study poetry! Your poem gives a connected argument, the building up of an idea being its beautiful aspect instead of some song-like or lyrical features that the verse doesn't have.

I'm a bit cautious here because since your name and face seem to be Indian, perhaps it is a literal translation from a lyric in a language you know and I don't! Maybe you sing your poems but I don't hear the music in this usage of English.

I don't know any Chinese languages, so one time, I collected all the English translations of a single Chinese poem and then made some versions of the poem as a result. That was fun, beautiful and very puzzling too!

The line "God values the longing for him" made me start reading again and pay more attention. My philosophy is physicalistic: for me, a spirit is no supernatural being but an idea maintained and evolved by a person or a community or a succession of those. Ideas are alive in their own way and have their own voices and influences in the world. The Divine Spirit itself is obviously some very deep-seated drive in all living things, the drive to discover whatever shall be best. What is the only way for a microbe to survive is a bit oversimplified for vertebrates, the inventors of love or for mammals, the inventors of imaginative play. Think about that definition, and there is more mystery and wonder, in which to get lost, than in any confusion of theology that I've read about yet!

Anyway, I say all that because it seems you are telling me in the poem something quite clear about the divine spirit and how to pray. Yes, it is a truly beautiful thought that you ably bring together via the thoughts in each of these lines. And as my agreement illustrates, it is arguably a divine characteristic, one that in our times may count for universal.

My mother opined that when some Italian invented the sonnet, he had discovered how many lines a song can have before the listener stops listening: fourteen!
I don't know whether she was right but anyway with my attention span which is quite normal I believe, I just love short poems, so that I'd say that by making short poems you have another advantage as a writer.

I have just been reviewing a poet whom I thought was making scripture rather than sense, by confessing belief in an afterlife fantasy. Not so beautiful: that philosophy comes across as an outright insult to everybody still alive. A devotional work would be different.

Oh well, I guess poems are a better way to express oneself than bombs.

I call your poem here "devotional" because it celebrates a real and growth-ful experience and is not meant to bewail the absence of perfection or whatever.

| Posted on 2015-05-25 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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