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    dots Submission Name: My mind in blankdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 617
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 560



    Description:
       Just sad of what man kind can do sometimes, but you mess with family and it's game over.


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    dotsMy mind in blankdots
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    My mind in blank
    Is useless thoughts
    That provoke
    Hidden sentiments
    Like a stored bank.

    When you withdraw
    Your feelings all at once
    You drain your whole
    Existence and
    Sometimes you're not
    There at all.

    That's how I feel today
    You show mercy once
    And some people
    Think you're weak
    All the way.

    When indeed you're
    Wearing armor and
    Are ready to die
    For the people
    You harbor.




    Submitted on 2015-05-26 00:00:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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