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    dots Submission Name: My mind in blankdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 660
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    Bytes: 560



    Description:
       Just sad of what man kind can do sometimes, but you mess with family and it's game over.


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    dotsMy mind in blankdots
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    My mind in blank
    Is useless thoughts
    That provoke
    Hidden sentiments
    Like a stored bank.

    When you withdraw
    Your feelings all at once
    You drain your whole
    Existence and
    Sometimes you're not
    There at all.

    That's how I feel today
    You show mercy once
    And some people
    Think you're weak
    All the way.

    When indeed you're
    Wearing armor and
    Are ready to die
    For the people
    You harbor.




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