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Author: Katrinagolden
ASL Info:    27/F/chicago
Elite Ratio:    7.22 - 228 /213 /53
Words: 65
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Give me the good stuff
The highlights to come
Don’t bore me with the details
The mundane, the dullness of life

Give me the happy and the sad
Let me skip to the end
To the grand finale

Give me the good stuff
Let me skip to the end
Allow the dust to settle
Let me know how it all ends

Submitted on 2015-05-26 12:11:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like this. It's short, sweet and to the point. The voice in this piece being tired of the "mundane" stuff, irritated by whats known and constant. I love the title, and I love people's love of spoilers. It's like that little itch we can't stop scratching. We know that scratching too much will irritate the skin but damn does it feel good to scratch until your heart is content. I do agree with Blue Monk, there is more to this piece that needs to be written. I felt like there was something missing from this.

Thanks for the lovely release!
| Posted on 2015-06-30 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  I guess this is an effective comment on the fact the we all today are totally saturated with available inputs of endless variety, thus time spent on any one thing is that much more lost on all the "good stuff" that might be missed should we dwell on anything mundane. This is somewhat sad but all too true it seems.

However, I hereby pause to actually comment. The comments that used to be regularly seen upon these pages have apparently fell victim to exactly what you write about. Who has time or inclination to comment when you could be reading or even (dare I say?) writing another poem.

As a feedback constructive note, I might suggest that you not repeat the lines quite so quickly or much. This is not a song with a chorus now is it? That would also give you some room in the form to add something new... some more "GOOD STUFF".

Very thoughtful here.


| Posted on 2015-05-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]

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