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    dots Submission Name: Brokendots

    Author: sunraybutterfly
    Elite Ratio:    3.23 - 70/52/29
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Did you even stop or stumble; and think about the day you disappeared. How I could ever reveal this part of me, and wash away in distant seas. Did you ever think about the way you made me feel, the scratches deep in harden peel.

    You came and taught me to be free, released the bird and set her be. I shared, I bared my soul again, and lit the fires to rage within. So I just carry you on my back, carry you in my head, leaving me on your heart. Like when souls collide and tear apart.

    Did you even know just how you rescued me? Allowed my heart to finally breathe, and show that broken side of me. How could you have stopped and stumbled the day you left, no good bye no signs just up and went. You never saw how much you broke my hardened shell, allowed my darkness to find beauty once more.

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