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    dots Submission Name: Love's Embracedots
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    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1556/457/118
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove's Embracedots
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    Arise my Queen
    your kingdom stirs
    the morning star ere breaking dawn
    bids westward soon to fade away
    in merging with another day

    Oh Venus child
    of loving grace
    thine hills and valleys softly call
    to echo promise without sorrow
    birthing newly born tomorrow

    Whispering
    your servant begs
    cool beckons to the fire engage
    the log of Yule 'tis yours to rule
    our special time to play the fool

    In ecstasy
    we hand in hand
    with lightening flash and thunder roll
    make tide to ease and seas demure
    the rhythm of the world ensure




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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the rhyming pattern...seems like there is an underlying melody that the rhymes harmonize with.

    I especially enjoyed the last stanza, which for some reason puts me in mind of riding a hurricane.
    | Posted on 2015-06-14 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      Good old mother nature?

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-05-31 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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