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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.76 - 92/129/107
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    and I marveled at what downess is in books,
    the saddest leaves I'd put up to the top

    where every day a lonely message stuck
    sore, like something fresh out of my own mind,

    never yellow spines that would make me feel green
    and over again, the light of un-learned words'

    I have to say, sometimes the message hurt,
    it's better to forget the unintended

    forgive me if I put them on the shelf
    now, differently, like something I haven't seen.




    Submitted on 2015-06-05 19:35:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I replaced the word "and" with "if" when I read it the second time. Hit the mark hard.
    | Posted on 2015-06-07 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      That's a Bobby dazzler, Craig. If all words were as intricately rewarding and condensed such as this I would be forever clicking on poem titles. A quintet of magnificent couplets.
    | Posted on 2015-06-05 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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