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    dots Submission Name: My Black Rose dots

    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy Black Rose dots

    He thinks he's mine
    and says I "own" him.
    I only want him to be free..
    .....like me.
    I will put no chains on him
    I wouldn't wear myself,
    and no pain will I inflict
    that I wouldn't want to feel..
    as if through pain
    somehow we heal.
    I will have him..
    anyway I want him;
    and through his pleasure
    (and mine)
    we will heal.
    From the ashes of what was..
    love will arise.

    Submitted on 2015-06-05 20:02:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the point you make, being together you attempt to regain a better individual state. As the two of you are connected you heal. As he is vulnerable to you, you take your love unselfishly and give him freedom, give him a sense of wholeness that is derived from your coupling. A lot of people don't get that in relationship so I applaud this.
    | Posted on 2015-07-03 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Great dramatic verse. Sometimes we can heal from the past and rise through the ashes. Some may still cling but once your free of the pile, the rest gets easier for both. Those chains can only be chains if they restrict the freedom your searching for. Of course Jani Joplin says, "Freedom's just another word for nothing left to loose" and if thats true, give me the ties that bind any day.
    | Posted on 2015-06-15 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually wasn't gonna read this 'cause I read the title and asked myself "Why bother?",
    needless to say, you took me by surprise. Surely, the choice of words and lackadaisical vibe this piece gives off isn't much of a trip, but the flow and its message are truly well-put elements.
    Good thing I gave it benefit of the doubt; I'm glad I read this.
    | Posted on 2015-06-15 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. this is fantastic. i love it. not much to say but that it is eloquent. i wonder if it's real since you are delusional. JK. you seem poignant and on point. good work.
    | Posted on 2015-06-07 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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