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    dots Submission Name: pathetic Junedots

    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotspathetic Junedots

    spring leaves, mirrors;
    the sun revealing (all),
    fl(ash)ing into blindness.

    now the expanse is
    one long grey tapestry;
    pathetic fallacy
    June is already autumn?


    so c(old)

    Submitted on 2015-06-07 14:45:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I got the wrong smile of recognition from this poem, because I live in Australian highlands where it's June now of course, but midwinter and bitterly cold notwithstanding a clear blue sky and bright sunlight. The scene is like your verses here.

    But that's not exactly what you meant. Maybe there is something pathetic about two hemispheres talking to one another and understanding something by accident!
    | Posted on 2015-06-08 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]

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