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    dots Submission Name: Mei I tell you I love you dots
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    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 53/167/173
    Words: 539
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       love has no boundaries. This was my way of giving tribute to man I loved And knew for ten years. The most beautiful friendship a soul could have. This was my way of expressing my grief of his death and the best I could put in words of a dream where we reunited after his death. He came to me as I was dreaming one night and said these exact words to me. Of course the quotations.


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    dotsMei I tell you I love you dots
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    And when I look up to the moon

    The circles will be you.




    Our expectations are so high it robs us of our eyes while our hearts

    break and fight.

    Our words have grown short and weak

    Love brings us to our knees.

    When I look up to the moon

    The circles will be you shinning brightly all alive.

    And you shall dance at a glance to the windows towards the west

    Watching orange splinters ever changing mass

    Drop carelessly down its path.

    Treading lightly through the whispers of love.

    When I look up to the moon

    The bright connections are a sight

    flying straight across this mid Mei night.

    Mei I promise to hold true

    Your stories and virtues.

    The loves and dreams of you.

    Mei, I take a moment to say we shared so much each day.

    You showed me refined ways to see and to be.

    And as you read all your books before bed

    I stretched and made my bed thinking there will be no more.

    No more people like this man. With love so grande.

    With connections around the world.

    Touching hearts all around.


    So as each night brings darkness

    I can still feel your presence.

    I see you in my dreams and hear you comfort me.

    Whispers to, " Be calm that it's all done.

    To stop crying for me that I live endlessly.

    I am happy.

    I am free.

    I will be with you as need be.

    I love you and be happy.

    So come on let's go see what's going on!!

    Down these streets we need.

    I am right here listen to me.

    You never listen to me!"

    For some reason why I know that you will see the greater in me

    Through these salty eyed nights

    And hallowed hearts enslaved.

    " I will be your light come visit me in the night.

    My love will heal your pain.

    My words will calm your heart.

    My laugh will make you strong .

    My life will live on.

    Through you are my glory.

    Through him I am here.

    Through light I survive.

    Through thought I can thrive.

    Be calm young one. Be still, calm that hurt of yours.

    See what you made me see before we said goodbye."

    Your hope was my hope.

    Your pain was my pain.

    "There is no more hope, pain or suffering.

    There is no more wonder of it or what will be.

    There is only me.

    What will be.

    Holy beauty."

    You are in my eternity.

    Mei, I take this moment to honor thee.

    When I look up to the moon

    The circle will be you

    Shinning endlessly.




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      "And when I look up to the moon

    The circles will be you."

    The repetition and variation of this is fantastic. The entire thing has a very dreamlike quality. Losing someone is such a personal thing. I guess that's why people shy away from commenting on pieces about death. I found it very comforting.

    ". . . stop crying for me that I live endlessly"

    This is very intimate, yet very encompassing at the same time.

    I'm glad you directed me to this.

    | Posted on 2017-03-02 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      this is quite beautiful. i hope this mei person knows fully it is about them. it's quite epic really.
    | Posted on 2015-06-11 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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