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    dots Submission Name: Begindots
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    Author: Blue Monk
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1547/457/118
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Thinking back.


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    a mote drifts the abysmal darkness
    bound in warm comfort
    an occasional glimmer... murmur
    betrays consciousness... life
    seeking all directions at once
    awareness... freedom
    pulled... tethered... bound again
    more and ever more

    comfort embraces
    arising feelings
    tinged emotion... emote
    ebb and flow
    this tide
    a song impressed
    of love

    focus
    echo
    motion
    wonder
    what does a smile feel like without a face
    a soul having no windows
    what's left for the cosmos to desire
    if not this




    Submitted on 2015-06-11 23:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This makes me think of the origin of the universe. How intricate and exact everything had to be to bring us to this point. And in all that sparking, sat the seeds of all things that came after. I think your poem evokes those things nicely. And leaves room for other things as well.
    | Posted on 2015-06-26 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]
      How long are you thinking back? Are these personal recollections or a cosmological reflection?
    I ask because the last phrase puts a spin on all previous words...
    these words describe the spark of (some emotion) within a mind as well as the spark of life within the cosmos.
    I think they do, anyhow.

    | Posted on 2015-06-14 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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