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Author: Blue Monk
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Words: 80
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Thinking back.


a mote drifts the abysmal darkness
bound in warm comfort
an occasional glimmer... murmur
betrays consciousness... life
seeking all directions at once
awareness... freedom
pulled... tethered... bound again
more and ever more

comfort embraces
arising feelings
tinged emotion... emote
ebb and flow
this tide
a song impressed
of love

what does a smile feel like without a face
a soul having no windows
what's left for the cosmos to desire
if not this

Submitted on 2015-06-11 23:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This makes me think of the origin of the universe. How intricate and exact everything had to be to bring us to this point. And in all that sparking, sat the seeds of all things that came after. I think your poem evokes those things nicely. And leaves room for other things as well.
| Posted on 2015-06-26 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]
  How long are you thinking back? Are these personal recollections or a cosmological reflection?
I ask because the last phrase puts a spin on all previous words...
these words describe the spark of (some emotion) within a mind as well as the spark of life within the cosmos.
I think they do, anyhow.

| Posted on 2015-06-14 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]

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