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    dots Submission Name: Untitled, circa 2010?dots

    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Going through old notebooks, finding some writings from a few years back.

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    dotsUntitled, circa 2010?dots

    The camera of my eyes
    captures the morning sun conquering
    against a wall of grey cloud.
    Let the sun shine down
    and let us dance in the Autumn wind.

    Submitted on 2015-06-14 08:47:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was pleasant. simple yet concise as a description. good work!
    | Posted on 2015-06-15 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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