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    dots Submission Name: My Adherents dots

    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMy Adherents dots

    If it's blood you lust
    Then take my hand
    And I will lead the way
    My dark erotic fortress
    Towering above the glacial bay

    Leaning into your calamity
    I grip your frozen hand
    I gaze upon you briefly
    while looking back in stare
    Our bare feet run through the sand

    Lust pulsing through your veins
    Fixed eyes-- a silent spell I cast
    Apathy overcomes me
    my intentions
    You will not last

    We spiral up the staircase
    You tremor with each step
    That type of ominous laughter
    You hear beneath my breath
    Bemused by your fear

    I take you to my slumber
    For you-- an eternal grave
    I have my way-- over and over
    My precious temporary slave
    Ecstasy, enlightenment fills you
    As I reap your worthless flesh

    A dagger in your back
    No slave to clean the mess

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