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    dots Submission Name: You Left Me Listless dots
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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou Left Me Listless dots
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    I offer myself helplessly
    His words drip vexingly in my world of shadows
    a lock and key opening the lies inside of me
    A beckoning lust to a gelid heart
    Promises leave her crimson
    marking her forbidden glacial form
    Leave me, worthless, quivering in your absence
    yearning for your dispassionate presence.




    Submitted on 2015-06-14 16:56:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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