I liked the contrast between the elements in this poem. The only part I'm unsure about is the rhyming of cruelty and plea. I know it sounds about right but something just doesn't look ok to me, I would change that part. Everything else is great. How you've been girl? Still posting here? I haven't written anything in these last years, that's why I haven't been posting anything. I've found an old poem of mine which I think is good and I decided to post it here. It's called Hologram. If you ever come back to this place, check it out, maybe you'll like it...
Ironic, at least from my (reader) perspective.
What initially beckoned my attention was the title, as I myself am Sagittarius, so reading this...was as though my passion were turned upside down.
I might make a response to this to show you what I mean. Keep a look-out. Thanks.