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Spring Flood


Author: Rhythmal
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Words: 97
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I'm not entirely sure that this is finished, so feedback is more than welcome.


Spring Flood



Your eyes are like ice in the early spring
But my voice is a fire born of memory
And I would speak wonders
Into the night and the dawn and back around again
I would show you the coming days within my words
So that you might feel the Summers love escape my lips
Because it's all a cycle you see
You're caught in the cold frozen end of winter
Like ice in the early spring
But my voice is a fire
And I would speak wonders
If you would promise me a flood




Submitted on 2015-06-21 02:34:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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