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    dots Submission Name: Spring Flooddots

    Author: Rhythmal
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 29/50/46
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSpring Flooddots

    Your eyes are like ice in the early spring
    But my voice is a fire born of memory
    And I would speak wonders
    Into the night and the dawn and back around again
    I would show you the coming days within my words
    So that you might feel the Summers love escape my lips
    Because it's all a cycle you see
    You're caught in the cold frozen end of winter
    Like ice in the early spring
    But my voice is a fire
    And I would speak wonders
    If you would promise me a flood

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