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    dots Submission Name: Eve's Choicedots
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    Author: Rhythmal
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 29/50/47
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I wrote this a couple years ago and I'm not really sure how I feel about it. If you like it let me know. If you think it needs work let me know. If you think it doesn't make any sense at all and is complete gibberish, please, feel free to let me know.


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    dotsEve's Choicedots
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    The Tree of Life, the Tree of Knowledge
    And the well from which they drew
    The love of a god that shrank but never grew.

    A woman’s touch and a trade was made
    Brokered by the Serpent brother
    A god as well, son of Yahweh’s mother.

    Eve the daughter, wife, and sister
    Of Adam and his god.
    Created in the image of Anat-Yahu

    She went to the tree

    Made aware by her Serpent kin
    Of the existence of these certain sins

    She went to the Tree

    Knowing well the consequence of this trade
    For her touch, her innocence and trust
    Something new, something old
    Something warm, to ward off the cold

    The totality of Human Morality




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      You know Adam was present during that fall? He was right there with her or so it would seem the way it reads in scripture. Eve gets so much put on her for this but Adam and Eve were a united pair. It seems there are many versions to that story. I like yours as well. The style in which you told it was unique.


    She went to the tree


    I love the drama in those words hanging in the air as all of humanity hangs in those actions.
    | Posted on 2015-07-06 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      fresh take.
    | Posted on 2015-06-23 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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