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    dots Submission Name: Bleeding Subtledots
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    Author: Rhythmal
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 29/50/46
    Words: 330
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    I've seen the future in my dreams
    I've felt the soft waves
    The subtle pressure of other days
    bleeding through
    ~
    It's a soft touch between the vale
    hands that are not hands but memories
    of unhappening things and could-have-beens

    A weightless formless multitude of possibilities
    without shape or direction or intention
    but boundless unfathomable potential

    Like soft waves
    and subtle pressure
    in my mind
    ~
    I can feel the heartbreak
    of a hundred thousand ageless gods
    As they look through the wavering vale
    and cry out in dreadful sorrow

    Their vision in some twist of fates or sour luck
    cut through the myopia and fell upon this existence.
    The godless nature of our reality struck them
    In a manner they could not have conceived or foreseen.
    Gods don't have souls
    but what piece of them exists within the vale
    Is enough.
    The persistence of this world is wrong in their eyes.


    There is nothing quite as sad as a gods weeping
    And whether it is for fear or grief they cry
    I know not
    The wailing crowds the vale nonetheless
    And though it is unnerving at times
    Every now and then all the voices come together
    And bleed through the vale
    melding into a harmony unlike any other
    an exquisite choir of otherworldly angels
    Truly divine

    The wonder of a gods fear and horror

    It is like nothing else to one who
    has touched the vale
    It is like joy refined and magnified, then multiplied
    Schadenfreude at a gods expense is like heroine to an addict;
    dangerous, but magnificent, and it makes life just a little better.

    And though it is magnificent at times
    One hopes, I hope, that these gods will one day
    lose sight of this reality.
    So that we may drift at peace within the vale
    Perhaps to find ourselves among like worlds in time
    Godless realities, a multitude of instances
    born without the existence of divinity.




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