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    dots Submission Name: Hmmm? dots

    Author: Chelebel
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 53/166/172
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHmmm? dots

    And if me can only save me,
    Then why am I always
    Letting Myself down?

    Falling short of my own glory
    Choosing to see the best when the
    Worst is always front and center
    Red flagging my eyeballs
    Like acid rain

    Ode to me.

    Submitted on 2015-06-25 02:05:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Humans are meant to take care of themselves and help others do so as well. No one's going to save you, this is why we build strength and character.
    If you have a mind, might as well apply it to your soul.

    As far as the piece goes, it's something everyone's endured, if not still enduring. I, myself, had the same dilemma up till I realized that I am the only one who's going to be concerned.
    Find something you like and become it. Then, you will feel the will to find the bigger picture, rather than trying to paint over it.
    | Posted on 2015-08-18 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a good that others can relate to. Your inner dialogue resonating with the thoughts of others. It's hard to comment on something so personal but I applaud the point you are making here. There is nothing wrong with being ones own caretaker.
    | Posted on 2015-07-05 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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