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    dots Submission Name: Short-lived dots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsShort-lived dots
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    We awake just the same,
    every morning, every day
    in our wake is how we stray,
    our talk, our walk, and things we say

    Sketched along this bleeding wall
    the universes' cursed flaw
    shout your legacy,
    shout it to us all
    for a chance to be writing in a bathroom stall




    Submitted on 2015-06-29 16:07:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm in high school and needless to say, this struck a nerve.
    In a good way, that is.
    | Posted on 2015-08-17 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice. Sometimes it feels like we're definitely writing to ourselves, but if we have a bathroom wall such as this one to document things... perhaps there's an audience that will come along some day.

    Liken to the cave man's painting on his own cave walls...someone today is amazed, at long last. How long did that those creative efforts await discovery hidden in the dark? Thousands of years? And yet, the artist is vindicated.

    Legacy revealed.

    | Posted on 2015-06-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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