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    dots Submission Name: January 23rddots
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    Author: Thenocturnal
    ASL Info:    24 / Male / Darkness
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 4/4/4
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsJanuary 23rddots
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    I know you never loved me
    I know it doesn’t make any sense
    Still, some whisper in the air
    For you, only for you my love

    Remember when we were young
    Remember January 23rd
    We were chasing butterflies beneath the deep blue-sky
    Suddenly, you were crying
    Cos I have messed up everything
    Oh I have messed up it all...

    And if you are listening this song
    Now you know I loved you the most
    Like a tear drop in the flower
    Like a shadow on the river

    But, I know you never loved me
    And it’s the worst thing I’ve ever had
    Felled like falling apart all the time

    Remember when we were young
    Remember January 23rd
    You were looking like a blue bird flying in the air
    Suddenly, you were crying
    Cos all the flowers were gone
    And I have picked up them all
    Oh I have picked up them all..

    And if you are listening this song
    Now you know I am already gone
    Cos love is like a myth and which I never had
    And I wanted you to have all the flowers
    Still you can find those where I am sleeping alone… alone...




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      Well I think hearing the melody and the vocals to this would really transform it.
    | Posted on 2015-07-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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