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Raphael


Author: Raphael
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Raphael



To fawn at the skirts of great masters,
A notebook by my side under the table,

Their crumbs are genus and swords
Of melody I will skew across

Our best clothes, our skinny jeans;
A potion of old blood in bloom.

In me are all their rivers convelescing
Though I smile as if the thing were nothing.









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  First two lines is content, the last 6 are empty and pointless.
| Posted on 2015-09-04 00:00:00 | by HisNameIsNoMore | [ Reply to This ]
  It's as though you've described exactly what I've been doing as of late.
I've recently moved into a new town, where I have two libraries and ample time to spend on reading. I decided to keep a journal, just to fill with quotes. I've read 5 books in the past 3 days - as I have not had this opportunity for years.
And not to mention, I have smiled more often due to this as well.
| Posted on 2015-08-21 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a pretty great observation brought modern day with your references. It is hard to exist in the shadows of greatness, hard to define our own voice.
| Posted on 2015-07-06 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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