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    dots Submission Name: Awashdots
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    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsAwashdots
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    It was
    uninhabitable, the world in which I grew
    and I only intended to extend a toe
    to feel the slight pleasure
    to know I could,
    the possibility of what might await me

    And it was
    everything to me
    that slight expectation
    that was cool at first;
    became warm
    as when confronted by the cold eventide
    instantly inviting
    knowing I would be saturated
    and held in the embrace of relief

    It wasn't
    what I expected
    but what I needed
    Shedding the oppressive incandescence
    swaddled in your temperate embrace
    Awash in you




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      Wah...I haven't read such a uniquely structured poem based off of longing in a while. Something so appeasing, almost relaxing to read. I can't empathize, as I've never felt such tranquility when involved romantically, but...I like to imagine how it must feel.
    | Posted on 2015-08-18 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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