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Low hum and calling

Author: Raphael
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Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Low hum and calling

Sleep-deprived in open night, you are awake
Where everything you say is like an esker

On the landing, the same old patterns, old coats;
They're fading fast and you have to remember

A higher wine isn't leaking through the door,
A childish eye, cut on a key that seemed rare.

In your safest top, you wait by the fridge,
You never did reach for light not easily wrung.

Submitted on 2015-07-08 13:48:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  With a few tweaks, it even works from the bottom up.
| Posted on 2015-07-31 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmm. yea. good work. nice to see you back. how ya been?
| Posted on 2015-07-09 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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