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    dots Submission Name: Low hum and callingdots
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    Author: Raphael
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 769/389/199
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLow hum and callingdots
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    Sleep-deprived in open night, you are awake
    Where everything you say is like an esker

    On the landing, the same old patterns, old coats;
    They're fading fast and you have to remember

    A higher wine isn't leaking through the door,
    A childish eye, cut on a key that seemed rare.

    In your safest top, you wait by the fridge,
    You never did reach for light not easily wrung.




    Submitted on 2015-07-08 13:48:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      With a few tweaks, it even works from the bottom up.
    | Posted on 2015-07-31 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm. yea. good work. nice to see you back. how ya been?
    | Posted on 2015-07-09 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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