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    dots Submission Name: Bitter memories are so cold dots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsBitter memories are so cold dots
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    These bitter memories are so cold
    But the thoughts of you never get old;
    I often find myself missing you
    And how the sky stopped being blue
    And turned into this dead grey
    And how to my dismay

    All the promises you ever made
    Laid broken and forgotten.
    And oh how much i hate,
    How much colder you have gotten

    Memories of times of a distant past;
    It almost feels like a distant dream,
    A reality i never really had.
    Oh, what it feels to live in a dream.

    When i close my eyes
    I often find myself lost in images of you
    Its almost like you were the light
    The moon that lit up my sky.

    I tell myself i was your darkness
    And that you needed me too.
    But i wasn't your darkness
    And the reality isnt so blue,
    You never needed me, did you?
    You left like the cold autumn leaves
    Fall from the trees,
    You left like the trail of light
    Disappears on a shooting star,
    You left like you never made my night
    Shine so bright with your light.
    Like it meant nothing at all
    Like it meant nothing at all.

    These bitter memories are so cold
    And though you never get old,
    In this crazy mind of mine,
    You'll never be mine.
    Never again...
    Almost like you were for rent
    These memories of mine are cold
    And it hurts to be in the cold...




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