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    dots Submission Name: Write us anew dots
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    Author: OneDarkFlame92
    ASL Info:    23/m/Numeanor
    Elite Ratio:    5.28 - 455/419/222
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 868
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    dotsWrite us anew dots
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    Write us anew
    :
    Maybe someone could write us a better home
    ours to name, hours to roam.

    Where nightingales come from afar
    and a purple veil covers the stars.

    Shining jewels become your dress
    upon the beating you're adorned,
    crowns of gold above our heads
    bitter and sweet fashioned lore.

    * * *
    Under the foliage we were found
    naked, cold, and coming to.

    Nowhere to run, nowhere to hide
    No veil between the world, and me and you




    Submitted on 2015-07-15 20:29:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have nothing to do and all day to do it in. I have nothing to do all day but enjoy your poem.

    Just as the Temple veil was ripped, so I rip the veil between me and you.

    The Temple veil was ripped at the death of Christ, and our veil is ripped at the death of me and you.
    | Posted on 2015-08-31 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm deeply touched by this.
    | Posted on 2015-07-25 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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