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    dots Submission Name: Orangesdots
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    Author: trinityfinger
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 136/344/209
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       Life in rewind a few months previous. Reconnection is almost tragic in how beautiful and fleeting it all is.

    Orange is her favourite colour.


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    In that way a cold sun warms up past
    ten a.m., natural and soothing in melody
    and affection,

    wild freedom in her eyes and a heart
    exploding with laughter, divine and
    persistent in memory.

    To another city I go, aching for what ifs, a
    connection which intuition tells me is as real
    as I've felt in thirteen hopeless years.

    Extraordinary should never be let go, yet
    here I am embracing loss in her perfection.




    Submitted on 2015-07-24 08:21:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it's best to remember that we will always place past love on a pedestal to try and give ourselves comfortable nostalgia in the situation, but remember that you both moved forward for a reason, and that reason was to move forward and full find yourselves before trying to connect with the emotion called "love". Your writing style is very passionate and I love how much I see when I read so keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2015-08-04 00:00:00 | by Zanitystar | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah i feel this one. hmmm good luck man. got a number? maybe dial it up? that's all i got to say. excellent writing skills.
    | Posted on 2015-07-24 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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