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    dots Submission Name: Temporally Transitivedots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1087/407/116
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Mirror or Mask
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    dotsTemporally Transitivedots
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    The black hole’s emanations attempted to fill the gap in galactic infiniteness as all spiraled down to its new beginnings while residual harmonic vibrations honed the forms of its becoming .

    The insect’s hum buzzed harmoniously almost melodiously in syncopated integrated vibrations as it flew across the room , out the door and into the night sky .

    The ship’s deck rolled and pitched as hurricane weather smashed and shattered its empty hull against the wooden dock .

    The blazing core of the comet streaked across the sky as it decomposed in the atmosphere and extinguished its self in the ocean .

    The blazing light of innumerable suns chaotic radioactive glair was almost audible like sounds of distant campfires as the last bits of wood crackled into embers beneath the starry sky .




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      Energy is neither created nor destroyed...
    This reminds me of a conversation I had earlier this year with a "fellow traveler" over quantum theories of string vs. quarks, and whether the hollow nucleus of atoms contained vibrating strings that echo throughout the universe. We never determined the meaning of life, but did send smoke from a pack of cigarettes each into the cold winter air and shared a tight hug before we went along our own opposite paths, proving even newly forged friendships can be temporally transitive as well.
    | Posted on 2017-03-28 00:00:00 | by WriteSomething | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems to me that you have five perfectly good opening lines to a story here. They are quite important, you know.
    | Posted on 2015-07-25 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm. This is some breath taking work Bruce. as far as the classification... Mirror or Mask. I suppose a little of both. My own solution is to step away from the mirror, and see the mask in it, and try to strip myself of both. I little bit of a hide, sure, but to only work towards growth.
    | Posted on 2015-07-24 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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