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Antiquated


Author: hyproglo
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Antiquated



"You work too fast for our system."


Your system is antiquated

Free thinkers have their limits too.

No matter how free they feel...they do not want you, if...

you have an opinion of where a direction of freedom should dwell.

Many minds try to make up yours
But common sense is the one you should emplore

In the ocean of common sense, we should all strive to be the shore.

"Lord...I know I will one day be dust and bones, and that is aliright.

Heck if I know and hell if I care
As long as you're here I know we'll get there.

I am just one man but I have never relied on a nightmare or a dream.




Submitted on 2015-07-28 01:11:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This sorta strung from one topic to another, so I couldn't really follow. But that could be just me.
Besides the fact that I do tend to be slow, I liked that no matter how lost I was, I still followed your trail of thought.
I like that you don't detach yourself from the reader - a fault of my own.
| Posted on 2015-08-17 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
  I was taught that if you want people to stick around; you should never talk of politics, sex, or religion. This poem feels as though it touches on this principle a little bit. But, from beginning to end I really love this piece. Simple, truthful, wise and heartfelt.
| Posted on 2015-08-16 00:00:00 | by Chelebel | [ Reply to This ]


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