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    dots Submission Name: Medots
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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    38/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 335/330/93
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMedots
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    And it has lost its understanding



    its "questioned sanity" has now retained it answers.




    This is not the covetable way,



    and to look backward would prove a better promenade.



    Yet my feet refuse the inverted treading



    so I continue my progressive motions.



    My heart refuses to listen to this recent reasoning,



    and weeps with its torments.



    This injustice almost brings me joy....



    what is wrong with me?



    I've lost my footing.



    Yet instead of finding my balance



    I allow myself to collapse to the floor.



    I allow the dust to collect,



    and wish myself invisible to the world.



    This is my self induced life torture,



    the pain I allow,



    the destructions I welcome...



    and everything my "beginning's" will result to..




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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the use of space, it made room for a pause so that when I read it, I wasn't overwhelmed with a bunch of statements. It seemed a lot more thoughtful because of that space, there is character where had the lines just piled on top of one another I think it would have felt a little cliché. Yet it ended up being a very beautiful personal and unique write. Thank you for sharing.
    | Posted on 2015-08-11 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This has some conflicting emotions almost as if there were a battle within yourself. Just wanted to say I liked it and thanks for sharing.


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    | Posted on 2015-08-06 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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