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    dots Submission Name: mind stormdots
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    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 53/52/31
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsmind stormdots
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    as I sit I start to wonder
    with the distant sound of thunder
    the storm rages in my head
    while I lay awake in bed
    the way I feel when we chat
    makes me wish I wasn't runner up at bat
    and the way to me its seen
    your not treated like the queen
    that you should be treated as
    always worried about if he is going to spaz
    if I could id be the man you are looking for
    but only if I was allowed to walk thru that door
    but I hold back and keep my thoughts in my mind
    to be honest its probably better for you not to find
    what the things that I think
    but hearing your voice makes me sink
    the smile on my face I just cant hide
    I in a sense wish you could be by my side
    this I know could not be
    but in a dream I still want to see
    you there by my side and a smile on your face
    but in the end ill always be second place
    its ok I know your starting to care
    and the feelings from me to you are fair
    to be honest I would love to be
    the one you want to see
    but I lay in bed and start to wonder
    with the distant sound of thunder
    the storm rages bigger in my head
    wishing one day I could really meet you
    and all the words I've told you were true







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      We talk in three ways:

    1. face to face

    2. in our imagination

    3. and we talk about you to others

    You do already speak in the last two, only one to go, and we will have 3D: imagined, gossiped, and fatal reality. Speaking in three dimensions is like seeing in three dimensions of length, breadth and depth: it brings us down to earth and imposes limits.
    | Posted on 2015-08-29 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]


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