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Submission Name: The Cycle dots

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Author:	TeslaKoyal
Elite Ratio:	1.76 - 19/70/88
Words:	68

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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The Cycle dots

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Inside yourself
A barrier
Around yourself
More barriers
You are just
A carrier
A message to bring
No tune to sing
But in a box
A dark black box
The wishing well
Is hard to tell
With bright red eyes
And dirty lies
The shadow man
Is scary and
He grabs you
And hurts you
Spilling his seed
Making you bleed
Gathers his crops
And he never stops

Submitted on 2015-08-10 04:04:14 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Sounds very nasty and hopeless. There is no hope and nothing but unspeakable nastiness. And being unspeakable, it is nasty.

I feel hopeless reading your poem and with no end to the nastiness.
| Posted on 2015-08-29 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]
Hmm this is kind of scary. Sounds like fear. I hope if this is a personal cycle of your own that you get past it. I think inevitably cycles can be broken. Moved from. Learned enough to change. I guess to me this represents personal doubt. Insecurity. Something i'm getting past, but something I've still got to work on a good bit of the time.
| Posted on 2015-08-10 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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It means a lot to them, as it does to you.