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    dots Submission Name: Evening 08/10/2015dots
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    Author: AsiaticFox
    ASL Info:    28/M/A butterfly's dream
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 254/389/301
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsEvening 08/10/2015dots
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    I stand out on the back deck
    clipping my nails -
    snip, snip -
    in the summer evening light.

    I look up for a moment, unbidden,
    and see the silent flight of a bird.

    Then I look back down and -
    snip, snip.




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      I've never been very fluent with imagery
    Can't say the same about you.
    | Posted on 2015-08-17 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      Do you read your poems aloud? I dont really so I dont know if it helps, but I believe this would read well. I like how you get so much detail into such a short poem. The sound in italics is good, it captures a little moment maybe. I see the date is written, is this a notebook entry, or something you recorded. Did you work on it long? It seems very immediate to me, but I don't know.It feels like being at home, but in the wild too. Nothing was particularly unclear to me.

    William
    | Posted on 2015-08-11 00:00:00 | by Angeles | [ Reply to This ]


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