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    dots Submission Name: Death's faithful dog (part 3)dots
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    Author: Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 5/13/19
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsDeath's faithful dog (part 3)dots
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    It wearys the eyes being optimistic
    Even in a heated library
    They expect me to live monastic
    "Excuse me sir, don't read beside me"
    When the blood comes in on the floor every night
    I wish there was someone else with towel in hand
    As I watch her peruse her copy of "The woman in white"
    It's made clear to me she doesn't understand
    A peep from me and she'll leave this place
    I just want to look at the poetry books
    Not looking for her to serve it up on a plate
    Now she's fluttering off in a huff

    I've cropped my hair tight
    In the fashion of a table-top magazine
    Even though we live in perpetual night
    The lowliest dog can find time for such dreams
    A Summer dress down to the water
    That's were I'll meet you in army green
    And though my uniform is tainted in pig-slaughter
    I promise you love I am keen, I am keen
    To know the fucking silliest things
    More than you read in the magazines
    More than you'd find on the internet
    The way you look at me is a hidden alphabet

    I... I...

    You what?





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