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    dots Submission Name: Seldom Does The First Windots
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    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSeldom Does The First Windots
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    These days, in order to light ablaze
    a single star needed to clear of haze
    And warm each weathered body o'water, land and other
    to slide the curvature of her arms
    round’about each corner

    So sleek on dipped feet
    and turned ankles Wrists twisted with plenty snaps
    To lug a dearest woman above the creek
    rather than through the cracks

    A burning ache and stiff bones
    These shoulders carry on every kilo

    For a mere kiss instead
    and a single hand Not a loan
    Knotty struck Only a cusp A windy storm
    Violent hail that catch me slipping per stepping stone

    By now, prop her on each shoulder
    and face her unaligned
    With the measurement of time & space, calculate in length
    Only then may one possess the right to state
    “What you compensate with passion, you lack in strength.”




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