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    Author: closetpoet
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    dotsIn other wordsdots
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    they dance across fields of yellow or white.
    oblivious to thoughts,
    frustrations and love
    from which they birthed.
    existence of contrast.
    wrong and right.
    powerful. subtle.
    passive. aggressive.
    pondered. used.
    up.
    spat in rage;
    lustful velvet application,
    regurgitated for our own amusement.
    emptied from my throat.
    mixed and arranged likeness, not unfamiliar just not heard.
    listen. understand.
    give. meaning.
    even if your own, love them, keep them, pass them on.
    embrace them.
    release them.
    kindly.




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      Not sure if it's because I'm in class or what, but reading this poem reminded me of what I often critique about these teenagers that surround me, haha.
    Quick question - was it your intention that "passive. aggressive." co-exist within the same line for more reasons than the fact that they are defined opposites?
    It made me reflect, as I had read them together instead.
    | Posted on 2015-08-21 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]


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