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The fish-oil tears of a weakling, were seen The potato-eaters vented their spleen For their sickly houses weren’t good enough Such dirt covered trousers looked too rough As scum poured into a diary with disdain That sophist would never spread upon his face Anything but pretty images, a serene aural mood Never without a boy in the depraved country brood Of savage pagans, hellish in the pagan West The thought of such sweetness on his breast He’d turn aside as quick as Peter In meekness please the great defiler And why now across the centuries As I make my way doing countless injuries Does he offer me a pale confession? The future should be sickened by his reflection In them, hidden secrets not fit to be burned Beautiful writing leaking on the page like worms In everything there is some nourishment And men will learn to glut themselves on curses When self-oppression echoes across the ages We will put it in the symposium like sages I'll take up a weapon for this Poor people hide in the alleys In the sunken streets at night I feel their thinly-veiled fear "They", but am one of them And if I brought death I'm not really wiser I've sullied my memories for a higher power There's never really enough water To clean this city about to go boom The blind half-deaf on the street can hear it It comes through their nervous system And makes them scarper like dogs begging to be put out of thunder and lightning I put my hand on the wall in the muddy streets Count to ten and try to catch my breath There's really little difference between the hound and I Both have grown unnerved at the depraved scent Of piss-softened cardboard boxes rotting The rags on lines drying out in the morning It would be cleaner to sleep in the belly Of a fish-head filled skip Gasping for air in my own ennui And no-one will see the bodies The wasting of life In this city that has been like a father to me Though the scars on my back from its belt are heavy 2:32 pm Grace won't you come? I don't know what's wrong with me I tried my best to get up in the morning But you know...I'm not sure why...it wasn't easy Some random night I have watched you do your dance at the pier You would hardly notice it I have heard your voice on the evening air While the other doors were closed to it I Decided to give up on life in a breeze All that I needed was the dream of you, Grace But your dance on the pier was more real And I couldn't draw my eyes away from the sea. |
I left a comment on this series sometime ago but deleted it because I second guessed what I'd left. Not that it was negative, just wasn't quite what I wanted to express. I'm back, I guess, because I've noticed other poems of yours in the needs comments section and thought I'd give it another go. I think the four poems as a series are fascinating in their story. There's a richness and multi-layered thing I really appreciate. It's very human. I like the contrasts presented by the brutality of butchering etc. and the tenderness of expression/nostalgia at points. I think this is how it is. I mean, we have to do things that degrade us or that we don't agree with to stay alive at times. I mean, that's the reality for a large percentage of the human population, and you present that in a very humane way. I think. I don't know. It reminds me a bit of T.S. Eliot (Prufrock) mixed with Roger Waters's album The Pros and Cons of Hitchiking. Not so much in content or style, just in terms of emotional content or expression of an individual interacting with his environment. I could say more about what I find compelling, but I won't. In terms of criticism I would only say there are some typos or minor spelling/grammar errors. Otherwise I think these four poems are excellent, quality work. | Posted on 2015-10-15 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ] | |