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The One That Got Away


Author: kase
ASL Info:    34, M, Winnipeg
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Words: 155
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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The One That Got Away



She pulled up in her car
As I approached her with unease
6 years spent apart
Made me shaky to the knees  
And as I went inside
I saw her face again
She was glowing gorgeously
She looked so elegant  
She smiled and said hello
As I focused on her eyes
I said I hope this is the last time
We ever say goodbye
She laughed and smiled again
And my anxiety dissapeared
I felt comfortable
I thought "as long as I am here"  
After a while she had to leave
Time for her to fly
Once again we were in a state
Of being in goodbye  
She dissapeared into the distance
When I wanted her to stay
The only woman that I label
As the one that got away




Submitted on 2015-08-23 19:52:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  They say the only thing worse than unrequited love is requited love. Of course this is cynical but just consider what would happen if she hadn't got away. Your life would change in ways you can't imagine, instead you still command your imagination in your poem, "The One Who Got Away".
| Posted on 2015-08-31 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]


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