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    dots Submission Name: The One That Got Awaydots
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    Author: kase
    ASL Info:    27, Winnipeg
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 169/398/234
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe One That Got Awaydots
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    She pulled up in her car
    As I approached her with unease
    6 years spent apart
    Made me shaky to the knees  
    And as I went inside
    I saw her face again
    She was glowing gorgeously
    She looked so elegant  
    She smiled and said hello
    As I focused on her eyes
    I said I hope this is the last time
    We ever say goodbye
    She laughed and smiled again
    And my anxiety dissapeared
    I felt comfortable
    I thought "as long as I am here"  
    After a while she had to leave
    Time for her to fly
    Once again we were in a state
    Of being in goodbye  
    She dissapeared into the distance
    When I wanted her to stay
    The only woman that I label
    As the one that got away




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      They say the only thing worse than unrequited love is requited love. Of course this is cynical but just consider what would happen if she hadn't got away. Your life would change in ways you can't imagine, instead you still command your imagination in your poem, "The One Who Got Away".
    | Posted on 2015-08-31 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]


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