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    dots Submission Name: In Addition, Fatherdots

    Author: MyPeriodical
    ASL Info:    18/m/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 288/229/264
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       Please do not comment with religious remarks-
    This scarcely has to do with it in a literal sense
    This poem is extremely personal. If you must comment, please comment without persecution and judgements.

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    dotsIn Addition, Fatherdots

    With a halved tongue and his burnished gaze
    By the air, he carved his Lord's righteous name

    The penetrating Word; a stream high and low
    Waters like the blood of God through every body and every soul

    What he saw and said tells me a single thing;
    By Heaven's gate he awaits a daughter, fruitlessly.

    Submitted on 2015-08-29 22:56:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      fruitlessly perhaps
    in a personal sense
    whirlpools of meaning
    hint of hopelessness

    beneath burnished metals
    as the shoreline floods
    there is still a pulse
    in this righteous blood...

    Just my thoughts on yours, hopefully without being either too religious or too intrusive.
    | Posted on 2015-08-31 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      He awaits a daughter fruitlessly. This is extremely personal. A cry from the heart.
    | Posted on 2015-08-30 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]

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