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The fly


Author: Angeles
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Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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The fly


I sat in a room,
My feet on the wall.
In my white socks
It dug into my heels.
And my eyes felt spacey,
For 5 whole minutes.
I remembered then
How difficult it was
To follow up my thoughts
With any sort of clear conclusion.
A silver fly went past
As sure as a fly could be,
It made its way through the light of the room
And knew where it was going.





Submitted on 2015-08-31 16:33:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  in the shadow of a moment
one determined spark of life
slit the spaces like scalpel
too tiny to be moved by grief...

Just a thought on yours.
| Posted on 2015-09-14 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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