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    dots Submission Name: The flydots
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    Author: Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 5/13/19
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsThe flydots
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    I sat in a room,
    My feet on the wall.
    In my white socks
    It dug into my heels.
    And my eyes felt spacey,
    For 5 whole minutes.
    I remembered then
    How difficult it was
    To follow up my thoughts
    With any sort of clear conclusion.
    A silver fly went past
    As sure as a fly could be,
    It made its way through the light of the room
    And knew where it was going.





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      in the shadow of a moment
    one determined spark of life
    slit the spaces like scalpel
    too tiny to be moved by grief...

    Just a thought on yours.
    | Posted on 2015-09-14 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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