Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Ponderdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Prose/Alone
    Total Views: 314
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 830



    Description:
       A madman without his love is an unchained smoldering coal, kept in check by the honor of his fathers


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsPonderdots
    -------------------------------------------


    I ponder, as I sit here in the darkness of the morning
    No sounds nor sights to fuel the fires of my imagination
    Yet vibrant pictures move in my mind
    The softness of full red lips, or the gentleness of a touch
    From a lovers eyes to a lock of fiery hair falling over ample breasts
    A warm familiar laugh as I reach in the darkness
    finding rough wool where her supple form should be
    An empty bed yields a fuller head
    Of thoughts turned dark
    A farewell wave that lasts forever
    A cold December sky in a graveyard where unmade memories lie
    A legacy of love, tinged with the sobering truths of life
    She waits for me, half a world away
    While he waits for me at Valhalla's gates
    Cold steel my only comfort, until I see one of them again




    Submitted on 2015-09-01 06:15:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      "An empty bed yields a fuller head
    Of thoughts turned dark"

    powerful and great lines. the whole poem has a feeling of just laying in bed and longing for that person which most people in love at one time have done in the wee hours of the morning, sheets all crumpled on the bed, pillow warm on both sides from being turned in angst. The most beautiful of thoughts occur when most others are sleeping. Lovely write i really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2015-09-14 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Definitely feeling the pain and longing in this one. Lady love seems worth waiting for and missing, the red soft lips almost got me thinking. Thank you for sharing this most intimate piece.
    | Posted on 2015-09-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is deep. .
    Kinda like that pearl Jam song
    If one may be so bold to compare?

    Oh where, oh where can my baby be
    The Lord took her away from me. ...
    An excellent piece of writing.
    | Posted on 2015-09-01 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    200613

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Ciggarettes written by Poetic_tragedy6
    no sky on the other side written by teika5
    Snippet written by Daniel Barlow
    Johnny's Cock written by endlessgame23
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    The Want written by Daniel Barlow
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    The World written by jjd
    A Worsening Effect written by Daniel Barlow
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    The Human Harmonic written by Daniel Barlow
    going,,,"Skin." written by teika5
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Dream written by closetpoet
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry