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    dots Submission Name: Ponderdots
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    Author: lucianraven
    ASL Info:    21/M/Spfld Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 49/67/19
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Prose/Alone
    Total Views: 572
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       A madman without his love is an unchained smoldering coal, kept in check by the honor of his fathers


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    dotsPonderdots
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    I ponder, as I sit here in the darkness of the morning
    No sounds nor sights to fuel the fires of my imagination
    Yet vibrant pictures move in my mind
    The softness of full red lips, or the gentleness of a touch
    From a lovers eyes to a lock of fiery hair falling over ample breasts
    A warm familiar laugh as I reach in the darkness
    finding rough wool where her supple form should be
    An empty bed yields a fuller head
    Of thoughts turned dark
    A farewell wave that lasts forever
    A cold December sky in a graveyard where unmade memories lie
    A legacy of love, tinged with the sobering truths of life
    She waits for me, half a world away
    While he waits for me at Valhalla's gates
    Cold steel my only comfort, until I see one of them again




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      "An empty bed yields a fuller head
    Of thoughts turned dark"

    powerful and great lines. the whole poem has a feeling of just laying in bed and longing for that person which most people in love at one time have done in the wee hours of the morning, sheets all crumpled on the bed, pillow warm on both sides from being turned in angst. The most beautiful of thoughts occur when most others are sleeping. Lovely write i really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2015-09-14 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      Definitely feeling the pain and longing in this one. Lady love seems worth waiting for and missing, the red soft lips almost got me thinking. Thank you for sharing this most intimate piece.
    | Posted on 2015-09-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow this is deep. .
    Kinda like that pearl Jam song
    If one may be so bold to compare?

    Oh where, oh where can my baby be
    The Lord took her away from me. ...
    An excellent piece of writing.
    | Posted on 2015-09-01 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


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