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    dots Submission Name: A Conversiondots
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    Author: Wolfwatching
    ASL Info:    28/Male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    7.67 - 96/136/118
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    The lamb screws in torrential rivers,
    Unwilling to pass with barely a murmour.
    Warm in the evening belly of Winter
    Carried along through pastures dull,
    It has broken dreams of becoming a wolf.

    Collapsing countries seem so far away
    It sees the stars go peaceful passed
    The empty house; a white-washed wall
    Clashing with the stones at the bottom
    Which try to break the river's thrall.

    He sometimes hears their dark homily
    “We hunger for the lost mouth of the sea,”
    Those jagged stones would turn him into meat,
    But the blue wind is beating closer now
    It glides and makes him bob above the surface.




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      I guess Craig I wish I could read your poems through your eyes -through your experiences and how you have penned them. I don't mean that as fault- simply that it's like walking down a forest path and you find that place enchanted. All the details are not revealed to me. But, I do, I wish that they were. :)
    | Posted on 2017-07-18 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      I was gliding along with the lamb in the cold river, dreaming to be a wolf.

    I have enjoyed your images juxtaposed. And was pleased to finally bob above the surface.
    | Posted on 2015-09-15 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]


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