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    dots Submission Name: Springtimedots
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    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 386
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       I guess this is growing up.


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    dotsSpringtimedots
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    I was gentleness and sweetness.
    See what this diluted world has made of me?
    I make love to myself
    To forget the wrongs I have done
    In my own name.

    Seeking independence showed
    Me my price; taught
    To apply currencies to
    The currents through which once
    Flowed only passion
    And placid dreams.

    I was honesty and bravery.
    See what these costs have
    Taught me?
    Trembling hands woven of scars
    All earned in earnest battle
    Against invisible demands.

    Oh, the silk that the widows spin
    (and how they croon,
    Swooning from their marble-topped,
    Photographed,
    Precipice.)
    Oh, they remember.
    As they weave my snares, sing
    In their brittle, hollow breaths:
    "I was gentleness and sweetness.
    See what this diluted world has made of me?"




    Submitted on 2015-09-05 07:25:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm, perhaps you should just see the web as smaller, call them cob, and call me cornonthe, Skilllessbaseterd.

    -Ryan
    | Posted on 2015-09-15 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      Ominous and scary, one should never order their scotch with water. Diluted and polluted rhyme, drop a dime on yourself and get back in the saddle.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-09-05 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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