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    dots Submission Name: Boru Rileydots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 446
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    Description:
       A poem to my son.


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    dotsBoru Rileydots
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    I need time to adjust
    you need to grow.
    No father to find.
    Your going to feed
    on my knowledge.
    Your life is mine,
    My story in lines.
    Making a mother of my wife.
    My wife your mother.
    Ask me to be your father,
    I don't know how to yet.
    But your smile
    makes me pick you up.
    I kiss your mouth,
    Milk in your neck.
    You make me laugh
    I make you giggle.
    You steal the land
    that is my heart.
    My heart that's Ireland.
    You can't even stand
    and your already my High King.




    Submitted on 2015-09-09 22:57:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful, absolutely beautiful. Nuff said. Good stuff. Heartwarming.
    | Posted on 2015-09-09 00:00:00 | by ShyOne | [ Reply to This ]


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