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    dots Submission Name: my curtains are far too open dots
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    Author: EshyFishy
    ASL Info:    21yo mess having crises
    Elite Ratio:    6.92 - 126/123/57
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Haiku/Gothic
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    dotsmy curtains are far too open dots
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    my curtains are far too open and everyone on the beach can look up into my well-lit room.
    i wish i were at least half-lit right now, dropping my dignity like i drop my wit
    and figuratively, would drop my panties if he were here.

    brief text exchanges between me and three other people, while a dull visceral ache thunders in my belly. the lower left quadrant, specifically. perhaps it is hunger for food, or maybe i feel ill without him.

    i dream about you every night, and every night i have nightmares. i don't want to forget last night, you were there, i hope it was as good for you as it was for me,
    bitter words exchanged through neurons and synaptic trees.

    i feel better when im angry, and you make the maddest i have ever been. congratulations, i have learnt to romanticise unhealthy behaviours, all on a whim.

    your abuse is easy to confuse
    with caring




    Submitted on 2015-09-12 03:24:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I agree. Also i needed that comment. Good vent, but yeah angry is bad, harboring anger is worse, getting it out is the best. Here works, I suggest getting out the anger here and finding the solution past it and communicating that in real life.
    | Posted on 2015-09-15 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]
      If your not angry you don't understand what's going on!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2015-09-12 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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