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    Author: Ethan Brody
    ASL Info:    35 - M - Chile
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 443/206/79
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    SAVAGE SIGHT

    By Ethan Brody

    I wonder what it would be like
    Not to have such a savage sight,
    Not to be distracted and write.
    I often stare at big old buildings
    And ask myself why they changed
    Or how it would have been
    To see their glorious days,
    When lights lit streets
    And queues drew smiles,
    When nets were plastic
    And words felt real.
    Now in a new realm
    Where no one cares,
    Where talks are brief
    And we look down
    We stare at plastic and ignore life!




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      "I often stare at big old buildings
    And ask myself why they changed
    Or how it would have been
    To see their glorious days..."

    ...and through the lens of a thousand eyes
    the edifice and its architect
    gaze at the fragile and unwise
    with whom time has made a covenant...

    Just some thoughts on your thoughts.
    | Posted on 2015-09-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I suppose sometimes it isn't the buildings. It's the building of life around us, and the building of a notion that we shouldn't hear/speak, perhaps this builds apathy. Maybe step out side of that, then you might find a community of things to care for. And we all need that community inside ourselves. Then it's easier to know that your cared for and can care for a community of common interests. I'd like to think EliteSkills is a community. Yet all things, to this dynamic of thinking, Communities can have Communities within them. I say take the community that you care for home, remember that home is where the heart is, and your heart is in your chest, therefore you can take it with you then? poetry-ProcessInLinearLanguage.

    --Dr Obvious.
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    | Posted on 2015-09-15 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]


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