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    dots Submission Name: "Facebroke"dots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The fake light of a phone,
    reading the fake life's of others.
    Friends with the unfriendly.
    Watching nervously,
    caring for the sharing and likes.
    Thumbs up means you own the world.
    One faint click makes or breaks your day.
    The feed feeding your insecurities.
    You barely look at me.
    I ask, " How's your day?"
    The electric glow dims your look,
    " My day's fine according to Facebook."

    Submitted on 2015-09-13 23:17:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm at the mercy of the masses
    a dozen strangers doused my flame
    ten million faceless fluid clones
    plankton all in search of fame...

    Just a few thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2015-09-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This brings to mind the allegory of the two people walking down the street together who aren't talking to each other but rather they're texting each other phones in hand. Where will it stop???

    | Posted on 2015-09-14 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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