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    dots Submission Name: Contemplating...dots
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    Author: vintagepepper
    ASL Info:    21/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    7.05 - 191/153/46
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       This is something I wrote when I was 15 (12 years ago) This was something for school. We had to pick apart several different poems and pull lines from them. Then change the words to make them our own and put them together in our own little "poem" it didn't have to make sense. I think there was a little more to this but I can't remember the rest. I really just wanted to add this so I didn't lose it.


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    dotsContemplating...dots
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    Pain has bought it, the price I pay;
    like rivers - deeply grown has my soul...
    into a slit that squeezed life evil.




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      "Pain has bought it, the price I pay;
    like rivers - deeply grown has my soul...
    into a slit that squeezed life evil."


    ...the price is too dear, yet the lesson learned
    is an acidic awareness, scorched and burned
    into the psyche just left of the soul
    that introspection has soothed
    and almost made whole...

    Just a few thoughts on yours.

    | Posted on 2015-09-22 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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